I end up with a rambling, scramble mess of weak storylines and trite characters.
I stumbled on a thread on the Script Frenzy Forum titled "Your Plot". People where just sort of dumping their plots on there- I'm sure they were just gabbing. I couldn't let myself butcher the sound of my story, so I took about 20 minutes and hammered out a little synopsis.
Ok, it may be too long for a synopsis, but its the most accurate abridged description I could come up with in 20 minutes. I think I like it.
"Nina is obsessed. She thinks she's in love with John, an 11 year boy and has been since the last time she saw him. She was 7, and now, she's 21.
She thinks she's seeing ghosts, too. Everyone told her she was making it up, but now, she's an adult and she isn't making anything up.
She can't even make a life for herself.
When the house she grew up in becomes vacant, she convinces her father to lease it too her and she moves back to the east coast to find some answers about her life.
And, she secretly hopes to find John.
When she gets back home, the details of her childhood become crystal clear- she never made any of it up- all the people she talked to to are still there. And theres one more- Jeremy.
The last time Nina saw John was the day Jeremy shot himself. It was also the only time she ever really talked to him, as she dragged John away from the scene and into her house while her mother called 911. And now Jeremy is in her house, trying to talk to her, trying to tell her to find John before he dies, too.
So, Nina gets a little help from her crew at her new job as a police dispatcher.
An affair with one of the officers makes Nina wonder if she should give up on John, but she can't- she's obsessed. Especially when she finds out John's obsessed as well."
See, no sooner do I push "Publish Blog" and and I'm already thinking "Eh, that's not great."
ReplyDeleteBear with me, folks, I'm a slow learner and have a bit of a crazy streak when it comes to blogging. I just post whatever pops into my head!
No, no it's great! I GET it now. See that helps me understand the first chapter now!
ReplyDeleteJeremy is a ghost. John is real. Did John shoot Jeremy or is there something more Jeremy is trying to tell her? I want to know all these things. It could be "prettied up a bit" but it has everything in there!
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Well, did john shoot Jeremy...no, I don't think so, but it's not out of the question at this point- I'm still working on that. I will say that they were supposed to shoot each other (suicide pact).
ReplyDeleteWell, good! I feel better!